Discussion about this post

User's avatar
Olivia/O. J. Barré 🐉's avatar

The difference between your versions is quite remarkable, Hieronymus. I enjoyed the first, but the second, ooo la la! Wow wow wow! As for voice, I totally agree that it evolves, along with our storytelling abilities. Even from a first draft to the last within the same week or so. Thank you for sharing this. I’m restacking in the hopes others can see it too.

Expand full comment
The Bathrobe Guy  👘's avatar

The kind of post that reminds me that voice isn't something we build, it's something we remember.

I love how you name the fear of getting it wrong, of not being original enough, of being too loud or too soft. That tension lives in so many of us who care deeply. And yet what you model here is presence over performance.

Thank you for letting the truth show up a little unpolished.

Stay entangled, my friend.

—The Bathrobe Guy

Expand full comment
9 more comments...

No posts